Wednesday, January 19, 2011

A whole new strain of bad writing

Ben Yagoda, professor of English at the University of Delaware, dissects this hypothetical bit of writing, which illustrates errors that are all too common these days:
For our one year anniversary, my girlfriend and myself are going to a Yankees game, with whomever amongst our friends can go. But, the Weather Channel just changed their forecast and the skies are grey, so we might go with the girl that lives next door to see the movie, "Iron Man 2".
Here's what's wrong.
1. There should be no comma after "But."
2. The period after "Iron Man 2" should be inside the quotation marks around the title (which would be italicized in most publications, including The Chronicle).
3. No comma is needed after "movie."
4. "Its," not "their," is needed with "Weather Channel."
5. "Whomever" should be "whoever."
6. "Myself" should be "I."
7. "Girl that" should be "girl who"
8. "Gray" is the correct spelling, not "grey."
9. "Amongst" should be "among."
10. "One year anniversary" should be written as "one-year anniversary," but, really, "first anniversary."
11. It's a "Yankee," not "Yankees," game.
Read it all.

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